The graph below shows the percentage of people by age group visiting the cinema at least once per month in one particular country between 1978 and 2008.

The graph below shows the percentage of people by age group visiting the cinema at least once per month in one particular country between 1978 and 2008.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below shows the percentage of people by age group visiting the cinema at least once per month in one particular country between 1978 and 2008.
The line chart below illustrates the proportion of the public in each
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who visited the cinema at least once per 30 days in a particular nation during the period from 1978 to 2008.
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the four different
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groups showed various contrasting trends in cinema visits over the era, the 14–24
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had the highest level among the others, with only minor fluctuations,
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the 50+
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experienced significant growth. In 1978, the proportion of people between 35 and 49 began at about 40% and showed a minor drop until 1988,
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witnessed a sharp increase, reaching 51% in 2008. The 50+ Adults followed a similar pattern to the 35–49. It started at approximately 60% and showed a small fluctuation, rose in the middle of the period, and ended at roughly 68% in 2008. The 14–24
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experienced a slight decline at the beginning of the date, starting in 1978. Their proportion approximated 91%.
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trend showed some fluctuations, and by
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2008,
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it was about 86–87%.
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, the 25–34
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began at around 80% in 1978, experienced a sharp drop, followed by a steep rise and
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a slight decline, ending at approximately 78% in 2008.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, group with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • trend
  • significant
  • peak
  • drop
  • cohort
  • demographic
  • cinema attendance
  • percentage
  • monthly
  • age group
  • contrast
  • decline
  • increase
  • steadily
  • notable
  • highlight
  • period
  • consistent
  • dominant
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