The charts show the online sales for retail sectors in a South American country in 2009 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show the online sales for retail sectors in a South American country in 2009 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The charts show the online sales for retail sectors in a South American country in 2009 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates the online
sales
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in a South American, for store sectors in four different things which is
,
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:
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travel, clothes,
music
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/ film, and books. 2009 and 2019. Overview, travel was the highest
on
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in
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2009, but it
fall
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fell
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in the next ten years to be
second,
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and in 2019
music
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and films and had took the lead, with
significant
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a significant
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increase before it was the third in 2009.
While
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clothes had declined in ten years, and books
has
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had
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increase
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increased
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in 2019.
Firstly
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, travel was 38% in 2009, the greatest online
sales
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backthen
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back then
, but it
decrease
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decreased
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in 2019 by 9% to be 29% second after
music
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and film,
then
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clothes it was 26% the second profitable online retail
sales
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,
although
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it
become
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became
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just 15% with
sharp
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a sharp
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declined
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decline
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to be the lowest point in 2019. After that
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music
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, music
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and film
,
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apply
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were it was 20% in 2009, before it became the highest
sales
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in 2019 by 33%.
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Finally
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Finally,
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books, it was the lowest point in 2009,
then
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it had
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a raped
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raped
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rapid
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rose
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rise
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in 2019 to
be
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apply
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23%
instead
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of 16%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, music with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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