Biotechnology companies all over the world are developing different types of genetically modified (GM) crops. However, not enough is known about these crops on our health and the environment. Interfering with nature in this way should be prohibited. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Genetically modified
crops
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producing
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by biotech companies all over the world
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there is
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sufficient
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information about them.
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, there is a way of thinking that they should not be allowed. I believe there are both pros and cons
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this
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issue. First of all, the
begining
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beginning
of
devoloping
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developing
genetically modified
product
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products
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was for
the
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good intentions. The major reason was
prevention
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from
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famine and
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of
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productivity
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the productivity
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of
crops
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.
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, biotechnology companies have developed genetically modified
crops
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and
make
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them more resistant to diseases and
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a variety
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of insects. Actually,
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idea
were
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beneficial and productivity has
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increase
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.
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, there is
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sufficient
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data and information on
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the enviroment
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enviroment
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environment
and our health.
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this
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reason,
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the mojority
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mojority
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majority
of people claim that genetically modified
crops
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are unhealthy and they may
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for the
enviroment
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environment
as well. I believe
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idea
have
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some true points. The plants became more resistant and unpredictable as well.
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the
crops
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can
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from insects, it can cause huge unbalance
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the
enviroment
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environment
.
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, since
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this
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crops
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are not past more than
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of decades, it is not impossible to predict their effects on our health in the future. In conclusion,
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the first intention of the idea of developing genetically modified
crops
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were good,
unpredictable
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the unpredictable
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future effects are concerning.
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, I believe
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this
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crops
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should be prohibited all over the world.

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structure
Strengthen your thesis by clearly stating your position in the opening sentence and keep it consistent.
content
Develop each idea with specific examples or evidence, and explain how it supports your view.
grammar
Check grammar and word choice. Use simple words correctly; fix common errors (their/there/they’re, affect/effect, these).
cohesion
Improve coherence by using linking words to show cause, result, and contrast.
argument
Clear position against GM crops is stated.
structure
Intro and conclusion are present.
cohesion
Some linking words and logical order used.

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