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News editors decide what to broadcast on TV and what to print in the newspapers.What factors do you thşnk influence these desicions?Do we become used to bad news would it be better if more good news was reported?

In today's modern world, we can see that we are facing
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tons of
news
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.And it isn't broadcast so wisely.So a part of humanity is not okay with
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 concern and thinking about what editors should pay attention to and what
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to
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 the viewers or readers on screens and newspapers.
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,factors of editors are
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this
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is
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 their job , so no one actually cares about what they post.But nowadays the community
noticed
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 that there are lots of inappropriate
news
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 except for the heartwarming ones, that can influence
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people
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out there
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in an
unharmless
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unharmful
 way.The factors of posting bad
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is including
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 the intensity and the mystery behind it.
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 there are
people
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 that can be disgusted from
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 issues example of a murdery,wildfires or another disaster which affects something in a harm way.
News
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aren't
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for only
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 impressing the crowd with one new they
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 makes
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 binge-watch their channels or programs. Those are the factors of bad
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 , but a sort of humanity wants to start or continue with a good
new
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 it can depend on a new at
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 radio or
a
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newspaper , so it isn't right to only edit and show
people
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 all the bad
news
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. To keep peoples energy up we have to give lots of ironic,nice,appropriate ones.it will be better to have good
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instead
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 of bad
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 in my opinion but we
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 have get our precautions for any type of disaster thats why i actually give impotance to both of them when its coming to being mentally alright i go for the good
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 that's why peoples has to prefer those.
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, we can have
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separate
 radio stations or different sides of concepts for
people
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 who want to read whatever they want. In conclusion,we have to be careful and need to recognise the viewers to keep the influence up and gain lots of fame.When someone notices and
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 the customers out, that company has to be
known well
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well-known
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 and obtain the goal they want to reach .

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task
Answer both parts in clear blocks. Start with one idea on why editors pick news, then give your view on if more good news would help.
structure
Make one idea per paragraph. Use a clear topic sentence and simple linking words like first, then, but, also to show how ideas go.
language
Check spelling and grammar so the text is easy to read. Use short sentences when possible.
content
You try to cover the two main ideas of the question.
example
There are real examples like disasters to show impact.
effort
You show care for the topic and want to share ideas with readers.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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