The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors who came to Japan for different purposes between 1990 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors who came to Japan for different purposes between 1990 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors who came to Japan for different purposes between 1990 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart illustrates the number of overseas travellers to
Japan
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for three purposes
:
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business, holiday, and
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visit
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visiting
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friends from 1990 to 2010.
Overall
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, business was the main reason for visitors in the period, but it and holiday
purpose
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purposes
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were
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apply
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both
fluctauted
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fluctuated
.
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Visit
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Visiting
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friends was the most unimportant issue to
Japan
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at the
inital
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beginning
.
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However
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it grew rapidly during the next two decades. In
1990
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1990,
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above 6
million
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visitors came to
Japan
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for business,
it
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and it
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boosted to around 9.5
million
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by 2000.
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it dropped to almost 8
millon
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million
in 2005.
Then
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a modest increase to roughly 9
million
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visitors in 2010. There were around 5.5
million
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tourists
came
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who came
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to
Japan
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for
holiday
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a holiday
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.
Although
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it had a slight decline to 4
million
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between 1990 and 1995,
which
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it
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met
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reached
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its lowest point. It had a significant growth over the next ten years, ending with 7
million
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.
By contrast
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,
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visit
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visiting
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friends was the reason that
least
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the fewest
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people
visit
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Japan
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. But it grew steeply to 7
million
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over the next 15 years, and had a slight decrease to above 6
million
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in the end.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, visit, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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