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The line graph compares how much time it would take for three companies to manufacture a refrigerator in 1990 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph compares how much time it would take for three companies to manufacture a refrigerator in 1990 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart illustrates how much time it would take for three factories to manufacture a fridge between 1990 to 2000.
Overall
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, all of the companies were sustaining
decline
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a decline
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the
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 time to make a refrigerator.
The
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Company
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company
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 B had the minimal decrease.
Company
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 C spent the longest time to produce a refrigerator during the decade
,
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 it
initially
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 took 35
hours
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 to make a fridge, but it kept decreasing to around 28
hours
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 by 2000.
Company
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 A had
the
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a
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 similar trend
with
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to
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Company
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 C, but it took 5
hours
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 less than the former
company
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 and
also
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 had a significant drop to roughly 22
hours
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 at 2000. The
company
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 reduced approximately 7
hour
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hours
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 for manufacturing each fridge in the decade. As for
the
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apply
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Company
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 B, it remained stable, with only a very
slightly
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slight
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 decline from 27
hours
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 to 26
hours
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 in the period, but it still manufactured more efficiently than
Company
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 C

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Vocabulary: Replace the words company, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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