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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant .

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant .
The bar chart given demonstrates how the percentages of owned
accommodation
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 and rented
accommodation
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 changed among
households
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 in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Overall
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, the
rate
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 of
households
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 owning their
accommodation
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 increased
obviously
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significantly
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 during
this
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 long period,
while
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 the
rate
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 of rented
accommodation
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 decreased correspondingly. Before 1971, more
households
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 lived in rented dwellings than in owned
accommodation
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, but the gap decreased gradually:
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 the percentage of owned
accommodation
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 increased from around 22% in 1918 to 50% in 1971
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 the
rate
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 of rented ones decreased from 78% in 1918 to 50% in 1971. Afterwards, the percentage of
households
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 that lived in owned dwellings had stayed larger than the other
rate
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, with the gap increasing: the percentage of those living in owned
accommodation
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 maintained its rising trend until the period between 2001 and 2011, when
this
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rate
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firstly
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 reached its peak around 69% and
then
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 fell back slightly to 65%, leaving the gap between these two rates at 30% in 2011.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words accommodation, households, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • owner-occupied
  • accommodation
  • households
  • percentage
  • sozio-economic factors
  • post-World War I
  • housing policies
  • economic challenges
  • affordability
  • societal norms
  • mortgage availability
  • economic prosperity
  • reversal
  • property prices
  • younger generations
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