Some people think that economic growth is the best way to end world poverty, while others believe economic growth should be stopped immediately to prevent environmental damage. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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economical
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economy
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, some people think that
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the economy
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is the best way to stop world problems, and, on the one hand, others believe that economic
growth
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it
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apply
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is bad and should be stopped to
save
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prevent environmental damage.
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view
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that it
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is about economic
growth
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is the best way to end world poverty, because economic
growth
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helps build schools, hospitals, roads, and other useful things. It
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helps to buy products
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cheap
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price. It is good for some people who
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about
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their own business and
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car's
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from
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centre. Economic
growth
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help
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helps
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to us
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us to
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being
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in good relationships with other
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like
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the USA
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, Russia, China and other
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.
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, with high economic we can upgrade our cities and tourism to tourists from other
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. The main problem in Kazakhstan
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is
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a job, so with higher economic
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growth we
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could
to terminated
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this
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problem. Second view it is about people who believe that economic
growth
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should be stopped immediately. First of all, it
is
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could
be
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stop
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our
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factors
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many jobs in our country could be lost, because
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a country
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with
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a low
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economic
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just cannot
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country
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. We cannot sell our oil or fuel to other
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and
the
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same time cannot buy other useful products. There would be a massive rally. In my opinion,
i
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suppose that we need a high
economic
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, because, as
i
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said, we just cannot live with
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economic level. We
even will not
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will not even
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be in
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the top
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100
countries
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with
good
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a good
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life level. So
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think we should upgrade our
economic
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to
high
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a high
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level, we should build more buildings and improve industry.

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structure
Plan before you write. Make a short intro, 2 body parts (one for each view), and a clear ending that states your view.
coherence
Use a clear topic sentence in each paragraph. Start with the main idea so the reader knows what follows.
content
Give more detail for each point. Use examples that relate to the task, like jobs, money, schools, roads in a real country.
grammar
Choose simple, exact words and fix big grammar mistakes. Check word form and sentence order.
task
End with your own view that comes from the ideas you gave in the body. Be careful not to mix ideas in one line.
content
The essay shows the idea of two sides and a clear view.
content
There are examples from a real place (Kazakhstan) to show points.
structure
The writer tries to link ideas across paragraphs.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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