Some people prefer to buy high-tech electronic devices like cell phones and computers instantly when they are introduced for the first time, while others believe it is better to buy these products after a while when they are in the stores. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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many people's attention.It

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true that we can

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it quickly if we

buy

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buy high-tech electronic devices instantly.

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buying

these products after a

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may be a better

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with,the new products may

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some problems that nobody knows.If we buy it later, we can know

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others

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to buy

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if we buy it later,we can save more money.So,

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buying

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is a better choice for me.

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structure

Use clear paragraphs. Start with a short intro that says your view, then a paragraph for each side, then a short end.

development

Give one or two clear reasons for your view and add a simple example.

grammar

Fix spelling and grammar. Use simple sentences with a clear subject and verb.

coherence

Add linking words to show order and balance, like first, also, and finally.

clarity

Your view is clear: delaying the buy can be better.

simplicity

The idea is easy to read, and the aim is to compare two sides.

argument

There is a plan to use two main ideas to back up the view.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
20
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

101 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Early adopters
Newest technology
Specifications
Promotional offers
Price drops
Initial hype
User feedback
Buyer’s remorse
Informed decisions
Comparisons
Competitors
Unforeseen issues
Usability
Reliability
Investment

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Include an introduction and conclusion

Writing about a new words you learn from your last level

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