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In the past, people usually stayed in one place throughout their life. These days, people often move around. They often live in several different places in their life time. What are the advantages and disadvantages of both?

Most of the
people
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 tend to leave now, because
its
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it's
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 easy,
compare
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compared
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 to the
past
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past,
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were
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where
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 there is
lack
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a lack
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of transportion
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transportion
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transportation
,
while
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 in the past
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people
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, people
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 used to be stable in
one
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place
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 and based
in
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on
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 their
nature
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nature,
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 they do not want to leave it, for different reasons.
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However
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 both of them
has
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there
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their
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 own
benifts
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benefits
.
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, with the
peresnt
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present
,
human
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humans
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now can
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can now
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travel
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 easily
useing
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using
plans
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planes
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, cars, trains, and even ships to move around,
while
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 in the
past
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past,
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 there were only animals
such
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 as
camles
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camels
 and horses
, it
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. It
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 was hard to
travel
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 or transport around the world in the past or in your area
,
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 for many reasons. First the lack of information , why i will move to
place
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 that i do not know about it anything, second the world now are more safer than the past,
people
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 used to be afraid with they
travel
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,
last
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 point is the opportunity to find a stable
place
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 to live, now anyone who what better jobs he had to move to the best cities around the world to get increase in the salary or to enjoy them lives,
while
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 in the past everyting you would need is around you.
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, there is much benifts of staying in
one
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place
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 like what they have used to do in the past, some of the
people
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 are forced to
travel
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 or leave their own home, for serval reasons, like looking for better life, escape from death or pvorety, or the lack option that they have, staying in
one
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place
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 as kid growing in that area can have great impact in the person, to like and love the soil he rise on, to have identity to know the history of the
land
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 and what
this
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land
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 mean to him or his greatparents. I always believed that
human
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humans
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 had to love
one
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land
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 and consider it as it's property, to develop it to build it and for sure
protcet
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protect
the
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his
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their
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land
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. In conclusion,
earth
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Earth
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 is our planet, but human likes to own and
wants
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want
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 to discover.

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structure
Plan your essay. Start with a short intro that says what you will talk about.
structure
Put one main idea in each paragraph. Use a topic sentence to start.
coherence/linking
Use clear examples and show how they back your point.
grammar
Check spelling and grammar. Use short, simple sentences.
structure
Finish with a short conclusion that repeats your main idea.
lexical
Use simple words and avoid long or odd phrases.
structure
You try to show both sides of the idea.
content
You give real items as examples, like planes and camels.
content
You make an effort to compare past and now.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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