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Band 4.5

Some people say that the Internet is making the world smaller by bringing people together. To what extent do you agree that the Internet is making it easier for people to communicate with one another? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

There is no denying the fact that
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the internet
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 has changed the way
how
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people
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 connect to each other.
While
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 it is a commonly held belief that the
internet
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 makes communication easier, there is
also
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 an
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argument
 that some
people
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 think the
internet
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 creates distance in real life. In my opinion, I
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strongly
 agree that
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internet
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the internet
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 has made global communication easier, faster, and more accessible.
To begin
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 with, the
internet
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 allows
people
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 to stay in touch instantly across long
distance
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distances
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.
In other words
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, friends and families can communicate through social
madia
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media
 or video calls.
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, international students can speak with their
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family
 daily through apps like Zoom or
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. Another point to consider is that
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internet
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the internet
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 encourages cultural exchange.
If it
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possible
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 to say that online platforms bring
people
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 from different backgrounds together, helping them to learn about other traditions and languages.
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For
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 instance,
people
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 can join online communities
,
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 to study foreign languages, ot even work remotely with colleagues worldwide.
Moreover
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, online communication
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 free to use in any way, but the old traditional methods
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such
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, such
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 as letters or international calls it cost money, and in the past
it
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they
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 cost higher
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then
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 today. In conclusion, despite
people
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 having different views, I believe that the
internet
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 is making our lives easier for
people
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 to communicate with one another, and faster for
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messages
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 to be delivered
in
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 the exact time.
Nowadays
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Nowadays,
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 the
internet
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 is more accessible
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then
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than
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 in the past
,
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;
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now
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now,
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 anyone in the world can use the
internet
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, even in the poorest areas of the world.

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linguistic
There are many spelling and word errors. Use simple, correct forms and check words.
task management
State your view clearly at the start and restate it at the end.
content
For each idea, give a clear point and a stronger example from life or study.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas go together.
organization
Keep ideas to the point and avoid repeating the same point.
coherence
The writer shows a clear view that the internet helps talk over long distance.
structure
The essay uses a simple structure: intro, body, and conclusion.
content
The topic stays with the question and is easy to read in parts.
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