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Writing Samples
Band 4

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers should be required to work in the country where they did their training. OtheS believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. EXAMPI Discuss both these views and give your . What Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

There is no denying the fact that we need doctors and engineers in our
life
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such
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 as
health
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 or building.
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while
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 it is commonly held
belief
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apply
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that they should work
at
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in
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 the same
country
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they
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where they
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 study
at
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.
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there is
also
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 an argument that they should be free
where
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to work where
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 they want
to work
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.
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this
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esay
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essay
 will analyse
this
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 topic from both
point
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points
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 of view and share my opinion. On one
hand
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is
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are
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alot
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a lot
 of individuals
feel
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who feel
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confort
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comfortable
 about the place they study at
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such
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People
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 who live abroad
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. .in
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.
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In
in other words
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 . They had lived there for
years
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years,
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 they saw the
buldings
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buildings
 and the sick
people
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 .
it
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 is
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 possible to say that
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. .it
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.it debends
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It depends
 on how the person
feel
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feels
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 about the
country
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 and the
people
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. .for
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.
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for example
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.
Alot
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A lot
 of individuals want to study
madicon
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abroad
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contury
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countries
 or their loved ones.
not
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 staying
at
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in
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 the same
country
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 can help
people
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getting
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get
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 more jobs and
trying
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try
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 new things .
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hand
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hand,
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 staying in the same county for years can reduce
less
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apply
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job offers and
carrers
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career
.
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opportunities.
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 We all know
who
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that
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 these two jobs are important for the
country
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and
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 giving them the
oppotunity
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opportunity
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one
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is one
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 of the most important things
can
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governments can
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goverments
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do
it
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will
raised
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raise
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 the economy for the individuals.
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 . Giving them more
jobs
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job
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 offers and
shows
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showing
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 them how they can help the poor
people
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 who could not buy
the
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apply
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medical
or
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care or
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finding
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find
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 the dream house they had
dreams
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 of for years. In
counclusion
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conclusion
. There is no easy answer
for
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to
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this
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 question. On balance.
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.
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itend
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it tends
 to
belive
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believe
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 that moving or staying
at
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in
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 the
country
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 it is
depend
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depends
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how
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on how
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 the person
think
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thinks
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our
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or
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 where they find themselves
at
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apply
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planning
Plan your essay with a clear start, middle and end. Put your view in the last line of the intro and restate it in the end.
structure
Make a new paragraph for each idea. A paragraph has one main idea and a sentence to prove it.
coherence
Use linking words to show clear links: and, but, however, also, for example.
content
Give one or two real, simple examples to show your point.
language
Check spelling and grammar. Use short, simple sentences.
content
The writer tries to show both views.
coherence
The essay uses some linking phrases to show contrast.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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