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Some people think that teachers should be able to ask disruptive children to leave the class. Do you think it is the best way to deal with a disruptive child in the classroom? What other solutions are there?

It is undeniable that some
students
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 become disruptive
inside
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 classes. Many people think that teachers should have the authority to ask disruptive
children
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 to leave the class.
This
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 essay will discuss why I think the teacher should have a certain authority to deal with
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 kids and suggest some viable solutions.
To begin
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 with, tutors must act immediately to stop disruptive
children
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, and should be able to ask them to leave the lesson in certain
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 conditions. Teachers should stop
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children
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, as not doing so can lead to
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 issues.
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 as taking school and instructors as a joke, and encouraging other
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 to do the same or worse.
For example
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, the U.S.A. government forbids teachers from asking their
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 to leave the class even if they were so
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cruel
.
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, many
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 started to disrespect their educators and are no longer taking education seriously. In terms of solutions, talking to
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 a student privately
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 their teacher might be effective. It is possible to say that asking them what the reason is behind
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 actions, and working together to find common
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 is advisable.
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, hiring psychologists in schools to speak with
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 pupils is essential.
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, a professional psychologist would be able to deal with all sorts of
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, including disruptive ones. They can see the main issue that urges kids to act
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 way.
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, having a psychologist in schools can significantly affect stopping
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 behaviours for good. In conclusion, I think sometimes educators ought to be enabled to ask pupils to leave the classroom. It is
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 true that speaking to disruptive
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 in private,
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 employing psychologists inside schools for dealing with
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students
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, can overcome
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 trouble.

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task response
Your answer covers the task but it needs a clearer view. State your main idea plainly, then give one strong reason and one example.
coherence
Make the flow smooth. Use order words like First, Next, Also, Finally to show links.
grammar
There are many spelling and word use errors. Check words like 'extremist' and 'crule'. Use 'extreme' and 'cruel'. Keep simple.
structure
Plan your essay. Have intro, two main ideas, and a short finish. Each paragraph should have one main idea.
task response
The writer gives a view on the issue.
coherence
Some linking words to show order are used.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • disruptive
  • behavior
  • classroom
  • solution
  • approach
  • implement
  • positive reinforcement
  • rewards
  • additional support
  • resources
  • counseling
  • therapy
  • involving
  • parents
  • guardians
  • supportive
  • inclusive
  • classroom environment
  • managing
  • effective
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