Some people think young people should follow the traditions of their society. Others think that they should be free to behave as individuals. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There is a debate over how
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children
live their life when they were young. Some argue that they ought to repeat the lifestyle of their parents, others argue that they can build their own life as they want.
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of adults want
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their children as well-behaved
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they acquired from their grandparents or grandfathers. Because,
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they care about them as they think they know much more information than
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the youth
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, if their child
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to live separately from their relatives that moment the grown-ups
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oppose
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decision.
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they stayed
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other
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hand, each person has options that how to spend their time, health or
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were given just once for
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should
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them
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different
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as
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way they can find their personality
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helps
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them to
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be happy.
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, changing their professions is considered
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, they can choose anything regardless of age, time or their surroundings. In fact, adolescents can get
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ideas or advice from
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the matures
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matures
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without new practices they can’t develop their individuality as they should do what they
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are inspired
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structure
Plan a clear intro and a strong end.
structure
Write about both views in two body parts and give your own view in the end.
grammar
Use short, simple sentences and correct grammar.
content
Give clear examples to back up each point.
coherence
Link ideas with simple words to make the text easy to follow.
content
Try to show both views.
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There are some real examples used.
structure
The idea of old and new life is seen.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural heritage
  • Sense of identity
  • Cultural background
  • Community unity
  • Formative years
  • Significant meanings
  • Passed down
  • Creativity and innovation
  • New ideas and perspectives
  • Societal progress
  • Personal growth
  • Self-discovery
  • Outdated or irrelevant
  • Adhering to traditions
  • Meaningful and relevant
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