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Writing Samples
Band 3

The tendency of human beings to copy one another is shown in the popularity of fashions in clothes and other consumer goods. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

Humans
always have
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have always
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 been imitating each other regarding
consumption
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the consumption
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 of goods and
fashions
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fashion
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 essentials. I totally agree with the statement
and
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, and
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 there are several factors contributing to it ,
such
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 as
,
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apply
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 social media , peer pressure , advertising
etc
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, etc
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. We will discuss these in
following
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the following
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 paragraphs.
Firstly
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, in
todays
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today's
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techsavy
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tech-savvy
 world ,
everyone
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 is
havily
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heavily
 influenced by what the celebrities consume and wear.
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for
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For
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 example, if any superstar wears
nike
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Nike
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 shoes
which
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, which
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 is displayed on any social platform, sales of the shoes
skyrockets
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skyrocket
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 and that tricks people
to believe
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into believing
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 in
quality
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the quality
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 of
product
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the product
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.
Secondly
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,
advertisement
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advertisements
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has
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have
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 overloaded the media ,which is making common people think that
product
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the product
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 being displayed is being used by
everyone
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,
thus
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a pschological
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pschological
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psychological
 impact is being created to buy that product. Probing
further
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, social media and advertisement
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along
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, along
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 with peer
pressure
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pressure,
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 created the impact called fear of missing out.
For example
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,
everyone
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try
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tries
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 far measures to get the latest
iphone
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iPhone
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 when they see it trending online and see that
everyone
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 around them
are having
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has
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 it already, which makes them think that they are missing some essential part of society. In conclusion ,
i
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I
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 would say that humans
always have
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have always
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been try
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tried
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 to copy fashion styles and
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the usages
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usages
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usage
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 of consumer goods in trying to be part of
community
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a community
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 or by being influenced by external factors like endorsements and digital platforms.

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coherence
Your main idea is clear, but the points do not fit in a clean path. Try to make a straight flow in each paragraph with one idea per part.
task
Give a direct answer at once and stay with it. Add more clear facts or examples to prove your point.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas go from one to next, like also, but, then, so.
language
Spell and grammar need work. Use short and easy sentences to avoid mistakes.
stance
The writer shows a clear view by agreeing with the statement.
structure
The text has a plan with 'First', 'Second', and a conclusion.
content
Examples are used to back points.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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