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In some countries, most people prefer to rent a house rather than buying one. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of renting.

It is more common for
people
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 to
rent
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houses
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 than
purchasing
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to purchase
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 one, in some countries. In
this
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 essay, I will describe the benefits and drawbacks of
the
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house
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 ownership. One of the major advantages of living in a
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rent
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rented
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house
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 is the
temporal
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lower
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cost
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 . Since the
cost
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 of
houses
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are
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is
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 skyrocketing in some
country
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countries
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,
such
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 as Australia and Dubai, it isn't affordable for the majority of
people
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 to continuously spend a large amount of money
to
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on
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house
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 loans.
In addition
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, having
a
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ownership of
houses
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, which means you have to pay expensive taxes for the asset you own, even if you haven't finished the loan yet. It is obvious that paying
loan
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loans
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 and
tax
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taxes
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 at the same time can put
strain
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a strain
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 on household
finance
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finances
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. If you live in a
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rent
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house
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, the monthly expense is likely to be much cheaper. The second benefit of renting
houses
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 is the flexibility. Owning a
house
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 makes it difficult for one to work in a
distance
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distant
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 place.
This
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encourage
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encourages
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people
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 to work only in a small range of
site
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sites
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, meaning they may possibly lose their chances to get a more comfortable and highly paid
job
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.
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, in some places, there might be many
competetors
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competitors
 in your work field,
while
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 in other regions, it can be much
easy
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 to get a
job
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 with even higher wages.
Stabilizing
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 your living, sometimes
limit
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limits
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people
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 in
seek for
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seeking
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 better occupations.
However
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, owning
houses
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 can be
cost
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-effective in
a
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the
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 long run, because
house
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 owners don't have to pay
rent
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 after they finish their loan. Which leads to
better
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a better
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 financial condition
,
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apply
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 after retiring
job
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. Nowadays, pensions are decreasing and as the government is encouraging
people
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 to save money for retirement, it is best
planning
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to plan
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 less
expences
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expenses
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 in
the
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apply
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later life.
Furthermore
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,
houses
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 can be passed to
next
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the next
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 generation as
a
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an
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 asset. Ownership of
houses
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 may help descendants to survive in a
steep
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difficult
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 situation
of
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in
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 life by
eitherliving
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either living
 in it or selling it.
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,
while
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 the merits of renting
houses
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 are the low temporal
cost
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 and the flexibility to move to other places in seek
for
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of
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job
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a job
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, the demerits are the
long run
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long-term
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cost
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 and the poor asset to pass
dawn
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down
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 to next generations.

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task response
State one main idea clearly in each paragraph and end with a short, clear conclusion that restates your view. Check that you truly compare renting and owning, not mix points.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear links between ideas. Start a new paragraph for a new idea and use simple words like also, but, however, for example to guide the reader.
strength
The essay shows a fair attempt to discuss both sides of renting and owning.
strength
The essay gives some real examples (Australia and Dubai) to support points.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rent
  • buy
  • home
  • house
  • owner
  • landlord
  • tenant
  • lease
  • contract
  • deposit
  • monthly
  • money
  • cost
  • price
  • loan
  • repair
  • fix
  • maintenance
  • move
  • stay
  • freedom
  • budget
  • plan
  • future
  • advantage
  • disadvantage
  • plus
  • minus
  • security
  • risks
  • rules
  • change
  • place
  • own
  • ownership
  • money
  • income
  • stay longer
  • stay short
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