The map illustrates the changes in Stockford City in 1986 and present time. Summarize the key points and make comparison. Write the essay in 150 words.

The map illustrates the changes in Stockford City in 1986 and present time. Summarize the key points and make comparison. Write the essay in 150 words.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The map illustrates the changes in Stockford City in 1986 and present time. Summarize the key points and make comparison. Write the essay in 150 words.
The map depicts how Stockford
City
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has changed from 1986 to the present.
Overall
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, the
city
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has
becomed
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become
more
urbanized
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urbanised
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, with
increasing
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an increasing
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number of houses
including
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, including
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retirement
home
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homes
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, and primary
school
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enlargement,
while
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farmland area, gardens and shops disappeared. In 1930, there
were
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was
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a large house and gardens next
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th
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the
main
raod
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road
in the
city
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centre. Nearby the
city
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centre, the primary
school
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and some residential houses were located along the right side of the main road before the bridge. Post office, shops and other housing were opposite
to
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the primary
school
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.
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, one location of the farmland was situated in the north-east,
while
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the other was in the south-west between the river stroke and the main road. At present, the two locations of farmland have been removed to make way for the construction of more residential housing and
street
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streets
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.
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, the two shops
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also have
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have also
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been demolished for the same reason. The large house has been converted
to
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into
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retirement
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a retirement
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home, and a new street has been connected
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this to
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to this
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the
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from the
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main road.
Some
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A
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new house has been built on either side of
this
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street. The primary
school
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remains at the same location, with two
more
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apply
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new buildings
have been
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apply
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added.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words city, school with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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