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Band 3

The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement

Some
people
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 are of the opinion that enhancing
people
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's
lives
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 should be the most significant purpose of
science
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. In my opinion, I partly agree with
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 many reasons that are displayed
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 essay. On the one hand,
Nowadays
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, there are
alot
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a lot
 of issues in
people
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's
lives
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 which continuously exist and make our
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 hard. A
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 of
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 are having to use dirty
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, some chronic diseases which still don't have the medicine, vaccine or therapy for them, are ...to the
people
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's
livespan
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lifespan
,... with the
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from
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science
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. Not only does it improve the quality of
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lives
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life
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, but it
also
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 helps
people
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 devote to the development of
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due to
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 their strong health and better brain.
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an achievement
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which
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called "fresh
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" to provide
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 way to make
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 cleaner
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also
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 built some wells, a robot that can estimate how fresh the
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 is for
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. They don't need to worry about dangerous diseases.
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,
Science
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 must pay attention and help some kinds of plants and
animal
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animals
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. A lot of insects eat fruit and leaves
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harm
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can harm
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to
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the
developement
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development
 of
plant
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the plant
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.
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the illness and
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illness and the
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 flu, some kind of
animal
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animals
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 can die. If
science
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 could create
vaccine
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vaccines
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 and
medicine
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medicines
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, plants and animals
can
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 be unique. In conclusion,
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science
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's aim
shouldbe
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should be
 not only for
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people
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lives
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, but
aslo
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also
 for plants and animals
which
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, which
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 makes our world more beautiful.

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structure
Plan your answer. State your view clearly in one line at the start. Then give two or three main ideas and end with a short close.
linking
Use simple linking words to join ideas. Use 'and', 'but', 'for example', 'also'.
lexical
Be clear and short. One idea per sentence. Avoid long, hard phrases.
content
Check the facts and use real, simple examples. Do not use odd names or wrong facts.
grammar
Watch grammar. Use correct verb form and plural. Use full stops and capital letters.
content
The writer shows some view of agreeing partly.
structure
The essay tries to give two sides of the topic.
content
Some examples are used to back ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • technological advancements
  • medical discoveries
  • life-changing inventions
  • innovations
  • solutions to human problems
  • enhancing quality of life
  • improvement of healthcare
  • transportation
  • communication
  • agriculture
  • energy sectors
  • eradication of diseases
  • prolongation of life expectancy
  • global challenges
  • climate change
  • overpopulation
  • food security
  • developed world
  • underprivileged communities
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