The graph gives information about coffee production in 4 different countries from 1990 to 2010.

The graph gives information about coffee production in 4 different countries from 1990 to 2010.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph gives information about coffee production in 4 different countries from 1990 to 2010.
The figure compares data about coffee
producing
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production
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in 4 countries
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such
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, such
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as
:
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apply
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Brazil,
Columbia
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Colombia
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,
Indonesia
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,
Vietnam
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and Vietnam
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, among
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among
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from
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1990-2010 years
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, it is evident that Brazil remained
on
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in
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dominant
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a dominant
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position throughout
of
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apply
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the period ,
whereas
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Columbia
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Colombia
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consistently decreased ,
while
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both countries Vietnam and
Indonesia
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also
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showed
continuous
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a continuous
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rise. In 1990
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,
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Brasilia produced around 0,7
million
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tons
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of coffee ,making it
largest
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the largest
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producer among
four
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the four
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nations .
This
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figure rose steadily to 1million
tons
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In
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in
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1995 and reached approximately 1.5
million
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by 2000. By the end of
period
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the period
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Brazils
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Brazil's
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production peaked
nearly
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at nearly
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1,9
million
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. Representing almost
threefold
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a threefold
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increase from
initial
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the initial
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level.
Indonesia
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also
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grew gradually , doubling
it is
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its
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output to around 0,4
million
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tons
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in 2010. In terms of Vietnam,
this
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country showed
increase
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an increase
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as
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, as
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well as
Indonesia
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rose from 0,1
million
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tons
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to almost 0,3
million
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by 2010
In
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contrast
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contrast,
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Colombia performed
consistent
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a consistent
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decrease. It is production started at 0,6
million
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tons
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, and reached
low
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a low
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point among other countries with 0,3
million
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tons
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in 2010

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words indonesia, million, tons with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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