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Some argue that universities should focus on preparing students for the job market, while others believe they should prioritize academic knowledge. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

It is often argued that higher education should be geared toward practical job
prepration
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preparation
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 others think that academic knowledge should be paramount. In my view,
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 gaining more educational knowledge is always a good thing, whether
if its
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 for your résumé after graduation or just furthering your
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 knowledge, ultimately one would need practical hands-on experience to make
living
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 after graduation. In
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 essay, I will examine both views.

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structure
Add two body paragraphs. Each side should have one clear main idea.
content
End with a clear view of your own. Make this stand out.
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Add a short conclusion that sums up what you said.
grammar
Check word use and fix small grammar mistakes, like 'prepration' or 'whether if'.
content
You show a plan with 'In this essay, I will examine both views'.
structure
There is a view and some attempt to compare the two sides.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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