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Band 2

The values that we learn from our parents and family have a greater influence on our future success than any knowledge and skills we learn at school. How far do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

The researchers made use of a range of methods to test their hypothesis. Working in vitro under controlled conditions, they first expressed and purified the L834R mutant of the kinase domain and
then
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 measured its catalytic activity against a peptide substrate. Because
that
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dimeric receptors can attain millimolar range
concentrations
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 they added a hexa-histidine tag and carefully tethered the kinase to DOGS-NTA-Ni -loaded vesicles.
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, they report obtaining WT EGFR crystals in the same lattice and note that apo-EGFR kinase domain
crystalized
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 under distinct conditions. To back their findings, a cell transduction assay was used to observe phosphorylation at three C-terminal tail sites.

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task response
The task asks for your view on the idea in the prompt. The text given is not on the prompt and does not show a clear view. It mainly lists lab work.
structure
Add a short intro that shows your view, and a short end that restates it.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas go a step by step.
coherence
Keep one main idea in each paragraph and use a simple example.
lexical
Use simple, clear words. Avoid long or hard tech terms unless they are needed for the point.
content
The text shows many exact lab facts.
structure
It shows a clear order of steps in how the work was done.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • influence
  • future success
  • family values
  • knowledge and skills
  • shape
  • beliefs
  • behavior
  • emotional support
  • encouragement
  • academic education
  • discipline
  • time management
  • contribute to
  • extent
  • agree
  • disagree
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