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It is now convinient for scientists and tourists to travel to remote natural environment, such as the South Pole. Do you agree or disagree with this development?

The authors conclude that conserved residues across EGFR family members drive a shared activation mechanism. Sequence alignment reveals that HER2 and HER4, like EGFR, are autoinhibited and activated
though
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 the same asymmetric dimeric configuration,
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 ErbB3, lacking catalytic activity, likely functions as
cyclin-like
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a cyclin-like
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 activator for its relatives. Structurally, their crystallographic findings show that
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 activation mirrors the CDK-cyclin mechanism, where
dimerization
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 relieves inhibition to restore catalytic function.
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, the study defines a coherent model that sets out how EGFR and its homologues adopt an intrinsic allosteric switch to control activation, each effectively serving as its own “cyclin.”

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Start with a clear aim at top and a short end point. This piece reads like a summary. Add a short line that shows your view or main point.
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Link ideas with simple words like and, but, also. Make each line add a new fact that ties to the last.
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Be careful with hard words. Some field terms may be hard for new readers; use easier words or explain.
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Try to group ideas in a simple way so one idea leads to the next.
structure
Clear list of main ideas in a straight line.
coherence
Good link between ideas and facts.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • advanced technology
  • transportation
  • remote natural environments
  • ecosystems
  • environmental degradation
  • wildlife habitats
  • conservation
  • ecological footprint
  • biodiversity
  • sustainable practices
  • ethical debates
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