IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 1

In many countries it is now illegal to smoke in public places. It is only fair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building. Do you agree or disagree? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In
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 paper, Zhang and colleagues sought to unravel the mystery of how the EGFR kinases become active. Their hypothesis is that the isolated kinase domain of EGFR is intrinsically autoinhibited. They suggest that activation comes only when two kinase domains form an asymmetrical dimer, much like a CDK awakening when it binds cyclin.
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, one C-terminal lobe in the pair acts as a ‘cyclin-like’ activator for the other.
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 resolves a lingering puzzle, as they say,” The mechanism by which the epidermal growth factor receptor (EGFR) is activated upon
dimerization
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 has eluded definition.”

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structure
Add a clear start and end. State what you will show at the start and then sum up what you found.
cohesion
Link ideas with small bridges. Use words like first, then, also, but to join ideas.
lexical
Explain any hard term in simple words and use a small example from the text to show your point.
content
Clear main idea about what the article shows.
language
Some good use of the quote to show an idea.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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