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Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure this survival of local languages and, if so, how?

Because of the
importance
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 of
English
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 in communicating with
people
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 worldwide, some
people
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 think it is more integral to learn
English
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 than other local
languages
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regardless
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 of students’ nationalities.
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importance
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 learning
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 schools, and local
languages
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 should be protected. In the following, the necessity of
English
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 as a lingua franca will be discussed,
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 by the strategies that the education system can take in protecting local
languages
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.
First
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 of all, it is generally agreed that
English
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 is important because it serves as a common
language
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 that
people
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 from different countries can speak. Many citizens from developed countries, including the United
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,
United
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the United
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 Kingdom and Australia, consider
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 as their
first
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language
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.
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, to facilitate economic cooperation,
English
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 is often used as a common
language
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 for written and oral communication,
so-called
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a so-called
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 lingua franca. Considering the frequent use of
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language
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 in the workplace, the
importance
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 of
English
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 cannot be denied.
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, Singapore is a culturally diverse country, in which Indonesians, Chinese and
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 from various other countries reside
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. To unify the
language
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 for communication,
English
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 is
adapted
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 as the official
language
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 since Singapore would like to develop economically. Singapore is now known as a prosperous country, which justifies the
importance
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 of
English
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 as a lingua franca, which facilitates international cooperation and
foster
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fosters
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 economic growth.
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, local
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language
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languages
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 are increasingly vulnerable and protection can be done through education. In places where
English
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 is used as a second or foreign
language
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, the
first
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languages
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 can become the medium of
instructions
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 for more school subjects.
This
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 ensures our next generation
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 the
importance
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 of the
language
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,
hence
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minimise
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 their chance
for
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 their local
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of
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being
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forgotten
. To exemplify, when Hong Kong was returned to China, teaching in Cantonese was implemented in primary and secondary schools, which equipped local students with higher proficiency in speaking their mother tongue by taking more courses which are instructed in their
first
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language
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.
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 secures the proficiency of local
languages
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 among students and
avoided of
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prevents them from
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 being forgotten, which can eventually lead to
disappearance
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the disappearance
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 of the
language
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. In conclusion,
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 it is apparent that learning
English
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 for everyone
in contributing
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contributes
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 to the incoming developments of their country, local
languages
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 are
also
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 valuable and worth protecting through education.

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task response
Be clear on your main view in the first line. Say what you think and what you will show.
task response
Give more steps on how schools can keep local languages, not just talk about them.
coherence
Keep ideas in one line per paragraph. Start with a clear idea sentence.
coherence
Use easy linking words and short sentences. This helps the reading flow.
overall
The writer shows a clear view that English is important and local languages should be kept.
content
Good use of real places as examples.
coherence
Some good link words help the flow.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global communication
  • economic opportunities
  • cultural diversity
  • endangered
  • linguistic heritage
  • inclusive
  • multilingualism
  • language revitalization
  • language policy
  • language preservation
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