It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

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to learn right and wrong. In my view, I agree with the statement.
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unforgettable and impressive.
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children
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like to make loud
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in
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public. In order to make them understand their
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behavior
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, parents might give
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a
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as they would not
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to have sugar today anymore. By losing sugar
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feel sad and
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, it is important through choosing the suitable
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to improve an early age kids to build value.
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be a good reward and
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system. When
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do the wrong thing,
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can minus points as the
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children
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to get the present
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that if they lose the
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they have no present. Personally speaking,
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to
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early age kids.
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punishment
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as washing the dishes or
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the toy box. In conclusion, I agree
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punishment
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can give the value of right and wrong for
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setting
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point system.

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structure
Use one main idea per paragraph and explain it with a full example.
language
Fix grammar and make word forms correct so ideas are easy to read.
content
Mention a view that may differ and then say why you still agree.
coherence
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language
Keep sentences short and use common words.
content
Clear position on punishment is given.
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Conclusion restates the view.
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Some real examples of punishment are used.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • punishment
  • positive reinforcement
  • consequences
  • time-outs
  • removal of privileges
  • open communication
  • clear expectations
  • consistency
  • fairness
  • disciplinary action
  • proportionate
  • moral values
  • internalization
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