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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

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punishment
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 is the way to educate little
children
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 to learn right and wrong. In my view, I agree with the statement.
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help
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little
children
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's learning because it with the pain and shame feeling, which
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 unforgettable and impressive.
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, most
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children
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 like to make loud
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public. In order to make them understand their
unappropriate
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inappropriate
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behavior
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behaviour
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, parents might give
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a
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such
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 as they would not
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 to have sugar today anymore. By losing sugar
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 a
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,
children
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 feel sad and
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impress
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though
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, though
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 it is
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negative
.
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, their brain will build the new value of knowing
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 noise is
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wrong in
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public.
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punishment
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 seems to withing the unpleasure for
children
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, it is important through choosing the suitable
punishment
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 to improve an early age kids to build value.
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,
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it might
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 be a good reward and
punishment
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 system. When
children
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 do the wrong thing,
teacher
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the teacher
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 can minus points as the
punishment
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. The point
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children
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 to get the present
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, so
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 that if they lose the
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points,
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 they have no present. Personally speaking,
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especially
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to
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for
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 early age kids.
Moreover
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, parents can ask their
children
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 to do simple housework
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punishment
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such
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 as washing the dishes or
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cleaning
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 the toy box. In conclusion, I agree
with
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punishment
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 can give the value of right and wrong for
children
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though
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through
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setting
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the setting
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 point system.

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structure
Use one main idea per paragraph and explain it with a full example.
language
Fix grammar and make word forms correct so ideas are easy to read.
content
Mention a view that may differ and then say why you still agree.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas are linked and to show order.
language
Keep sentences short and use common words.
content
Clear position on punishment is given.
structure
Conclusion restates the view.
content
Some real examples of punishment are used.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • punishment
  • positive reinforcement
  • consequences
  • time-outs
  • removal of privileges
  • open communication
  • clear expectations
  • consistency
  • fairness
  • disciplinary action
  • proportionate
  • moral values
  • internalization
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