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Some people think that young people are suitable for learning foreign languages. Some people think adults are more suitable. Discuss both and give your opinion.

Some
individuals
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 claim that young
people
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 are more compatible with learning other nations' languages.
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, others suggest that grown-ups are more compatible. Personally, I tend to believe that young
individuals
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 are more suitable for learning new languages. On the one hand,
adults
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 are the ones who need to have a foreign
language
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 in order to take care of their work and life.
Adults
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 learning a new
language
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 aside from their mother tongue would be considered proficient and intellectual ,especially
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have
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 their roots in jobs like public relations.
For instance
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, many advocates and debaters from great corporations tend to know more than just one
language
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, not only aiding the communication but
also
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 increasing the
overall
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 perspective of other companies about the corporation.
Thus
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,
adults
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 are in a flawless scenario where they need to learn a foreign
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.
On the other hand
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, young
people
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 and children usually have the ability to learn and adapt
quicker
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 than
adults
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. Young
individuals
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 tend to be better at recollecting information
as well as
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 data analysis,
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 making them more vulnerable to new vocabulary in the
language
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. Having
this
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 ability in possession ,
as well as
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 in the age of learning, makes studying a new
language
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 easier than ever.
For example
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, the BBC has recorded that young
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 worldwide are indulging in learning a third or fourth
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due to
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 the increasing need for
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 skills for future businesses.
Therefore
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, it is ideal for young
people
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 to adapt and learn a foreign
language
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. In conclusion, whether grown-ups or young
individuals
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 learn a new
language
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 faster. In my point of view, it is still crucial to learn a new dialect,
language
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 , especially for young ones.

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task
Explain each side with one clear point and add one simple example to back it up.
coherence
Use clear topic sentences at the start of each paragraph and use linking words to show flow.
grammar
Check grammar and word form; fix verb tense and prepositions.
lexical
Use plain words; avoid rare or long words that are not needed.
structure
The essay has a two-sided structure with a clear start and end.
coherence
It uses linking phrases like on the one hand and on the other hand.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • language
  • learn
  • speak
  • listen
  • read
  • write
  • practice
  • time
  • young
  • adult
  • child
  • school
  • class
  • teacher
  • money
  • job
  • goal
  • motivation
  • plan
  • schedule
  • study
  • memory
  • repeat
  • mistake
  • correct
  • progress
  • level
  • easy
  • hard
  • good
  • bad
  • better
  • start
  • life
  • work
  • home
  • support
  • help
  • example
  • reason
  • problem
  • solution
  • real
  • travel
  • use
  • environment
  • accent
  • communication
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