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The chart below gives information about the average life expectancy in six different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about the average life expectancy in six different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart compares the average
life
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expectancy
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 in six different countries.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 people in Monaco have the highest
life
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expectancy
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, followed by the United States and the Philippines.
By contrast
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, people in
Kenya
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 have the lowest
life
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expectancy
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,
while
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 Laos and Rwanda record just a little higher than
Kenya
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. Looking at the graph closely, one can see
the
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that the
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 average
life
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expectancy
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 of people who live in Monaco is about 86
years
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, and the United States is slightly lower than Monaco at 80
years
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. Meanwhile, the average
life
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expectancy
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 in the Philippines is just over 70
years
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.
In contrast
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, Laos, Rwanda and
Kenya
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 show a significant gap with the other countries
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;
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 their average
life
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expectancy
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 is below 60
years
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, especially in
Kenya
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 is only about 50
years
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words life, expectancy, kenya, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • life expectancy
  • average age
  • country
  • highest
  • lowest
  • more than
  • less than
  • about
  • around
  • a lot
  • a little
  • big gap
  • difference
  • range
  • compared with
  • in comparison to
  • while
  • whereas
  • similar
  • different
  • overall
  • trend
  • pattern
  • rise
  • fall
  • stay the same
  • vary
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