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Band 4.5

Some people say it is important to keep your home and work place tidy with everything organized and in the correct places. What is your opinion about it?

In
this
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modernized
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modernised
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 era,
people
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 have a high level of awareness toward their life decisions and the way they choose to live. Many
people
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 think that every person
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 to be
organized
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 and live in a super tidy environment. In
this
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 I will discuss why I firmly agree with that statement.
One
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 the one hand, a lot of
people
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 nowadays are ambitious and eager to seek the optimum level in every aspect of their lives. Since any human being
have
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 a lot to do
everyday
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every day
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, he or she must
organize
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organise
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 the daily schedule and accomplish all the duties in order to learn time management.
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, many parents have medical appointments
while
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 they
persue
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pursue
 their career, and it's commonly known that
these
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 type of timing can not be
rescheduale
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rescheduled
 easily
due to
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 their strict rules.
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, gaining
self respect
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self-respect
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 is derived from being respected by
the
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society. Some
people
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 feel
humilating
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humiliated
 when they visit the untidy person
that he
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who
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 did not
place
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make
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 any
efforts
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effort
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 to clean the place for their visit. It is a
series
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serious
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 issue
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, specially
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specially
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especially
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 in
middle eastern
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Middle Eastern
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 countries.
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, every house in Kuwait
there is
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has
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 a special hall or room
to
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that will not be used by the house owners, since it is made to welcome any guest at any time. The reason is
because
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that
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 they have to maintain it super clean and tidy.
To sum up
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, I strongly believe that every person must avoid
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embarrassment and gain
a
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self respect
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 by keeping
his
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their
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 place tidy and clean. And try to get the maximum
of
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out of
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 his day by following time management guidelines.

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grammar
Fix many spelling and big word mistakes. Use simple forms and correct phrases.
structure
Make one idea per paragraph and stay with it.
content
Give a clear reason and a real example for each point.
conclusion
End with a short close that matches the start.
content
The view is clear that keeping tidy is good.
cohesion
Two ideas are shown with linking words.
structure
There is a start, body and end.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Efficiency
  • Productivity
  • Organized
  • Clutter-free
  • Hygiene
  • Allergens
  • Creativity
  • Minimalist
  • Professionalism
  • Environmental consciousness
  • Sustainability
  • Calm
  • Time management
  • Aesthetically pleasing
  • Attention to detail
  • Economic
  • Impression
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