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An increasing number of larger shopping malls, areas and departmental stores are leading to the decline number of smaller corner shops. What are the advantages and disadvantages

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diffrent
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different
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 changed toward
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shopping There has been much discussion revolving around
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whether
people
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 prefer to
shop
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 in large
malls
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Malls
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 or
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those
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 one consider the small corner as outdated ,
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 and withdraws of how
people
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 tend to
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 nowadays . Shopping in
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specious
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 areas not only
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huge
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benefits
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mankind, but
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effect
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 the smaller containers somehow .
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 noteworthy that the malls influence the sales and the income of small stores .
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for
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 instance , a very attractive mall
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 beside a small
stores
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.
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nutral
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natural
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people
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to
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towards
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 the big one .
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firstly
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,
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provides a
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variety
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products and stores .
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secondly
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,
people
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dont
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don't
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shop
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their
 needs
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are in
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 one particular area.
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finally
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,
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besides
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life
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 changing that indicate
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the
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of
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people
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attituides
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attitudes
 that lead to a specific idea that the mall is attractive and more
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.
after
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 considering the
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advantages
, the drawbacks now merit some meaningful discussion.
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crowded
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crowds
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 in the malls
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are
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 so annoying .
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for
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 example , when you want to buy
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new clothes for a special
event
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event,
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 you will go to the mall
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, and
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 maybe you will spend 2 hours
to buy
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buying
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 a tiny product
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which is
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 you can buy
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in
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 short time from another small
shop
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structure
Plan the essay. Start with a short intro that states the topic and your view. Then write two body paragraphs that show pros and cons. End with a short conclusion.
coherence
Make one main idea in each paragraph. Use clear linking words to show order and flow.
coherence
Be precise. Use simple facts or real but easy examples to back your point.
linguistic
Check spelling and grammar. Fix common mistakes in word form and punctuation.
task
Answer both parts of the task: say the good and bad sides of malls and small shops.
content
The essay shows an attempt to discuss both sides of the issue.
content
The topic is clear and the reader can see what is to be discussed.
content
There is some sense of plan in the writing.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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