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The chart below shows the percentage of households in a European country that had access to the internet between 1999 and 2004.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in a European country that had access to the internet between 1999 and 2004.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given graph illustrates the percentage of households having
access
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 to the
internet
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 in European suburban and rural
regions
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 between the years 1999 to 2004.
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, it is pretty clear that rural
regions
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 had less
access
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 to the World Wide Web, even after the information technology boom, compared to the suburbs. In 1999, 15% households had
access
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 to the
internet
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, but only 2% of the rural areas were connected. Adoption of technology and ease of usability surged
internet
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access
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 to 40% in urban
regions
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, but the adoption was not as fast in remote areas, with just 10% having
access
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 to the net. In the year 2002, rural
regions
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 slowly caught up with
access
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, but not by a big margin. Adoption slowly plateaued at only single digits, with just 55% households accessing the
internet
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 than 50% in 2002. The rural areas had a boost in
internet
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 traffic in 2004, with 45%
access
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. In conclusion, urban settlements had a higher ratio of
access
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 when compared to rural counterparts, but it changed post the year 2000. Now, rural
regions
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 have adequate
access
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 to it.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words access, internet, regions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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