Some univesity students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Other believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for qualificatio. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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,
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been ruling the world in every field.Universities have played
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role in gaining
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led to debate among students whether they should study other subjects
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their main subjects or they should just stick with their particular courses related to their studies.Upcoming paragraphs will discuss both aspects
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my personal opinion. On one hand, if we strictly follow the courses specific
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a degree or a diploma,they can be mastered better as there is more time for them to study and
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, one can move
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particular
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a particular
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direction
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,if a student wants to study and be an army officer ,it would be more beneficial for him to train and gain more
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about combat situations and dealing with emergencies rather than learning about
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subjects like
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music,poetry ,etc. On
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the other
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hand ,gaining some
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about the topics that are out of scope of the studies can be helpful in various
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in your future life.
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,if someone
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to work as a diplomat for any
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country,
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he needs to acquire vast general
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to be
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answerable
in
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a typical
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situation
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he can't survive only with their curricular
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.For these
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one
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needs
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information from multiple fields. In my opinion, there are certain jobs or
field
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fields
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that require tunnel vision in learning and mastering the skills that are required
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there are
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some fields that
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function
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knowledge
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of a person .So, I believe that
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it should be
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the personal
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choice of a learner if he
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wants
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to learn
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more
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than his required subject.

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Use a clear plan: intro, a paragraph for each view, and a short conclusion with your own view.
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Check spelling and word choice. fix wrong words and constant mistakes to help reader trust your writing.
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