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The diagrams below show the coastal village of Seaville in 1980 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the coastal village of Seaville in 1980 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The map provides information about an alteration in the coastal
village
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 of Seaville from 1980 to 2010.
Overall
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,
There
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there
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 were
a
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apply
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major road
development
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developments
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 in the centre and west side of
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village
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the village
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 and vital utilities along
coastal
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the coastal
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 areas.
To begin
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 with, in 1980, there were several utilities and natural
environtment
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environment
in
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on
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western
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the western
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 side of
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village
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the village
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such
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, such
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 as woodland, marsh, holiday cottages, and
hotel
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a hotel
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.
Centre
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The centre
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 of
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village
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the village
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 and
East
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the East
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 Bank were majority
an
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apply
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empty
space
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spaces
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 with only
Tea
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a Tea
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 room as
an
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a
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 utility in 1980.
in
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In
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 2010, some major
development
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developments
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has been
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were
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 made in Seaville. East Bank had holiday cottages
and
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, and
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also
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apply
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a road and bridge had been constructed to connect with
central
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the central
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 area of the
village
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.
At
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In
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south
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the south
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,
Tea
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the Tea
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 room and sand dunes became a Hotel and restaurant
which
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, which
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 connected to
retirement
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a retirement
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village
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 and
boat
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a boat
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 club
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besides
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beside
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 the river.
Furthermore
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, woodland
become
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became
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 a golf course
at
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on
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northern
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the northern
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 side, and holiday cottages became permanent residential areas.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words village with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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