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The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

The most crucial goal of science should be to improve human
lives
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 essay strongly agrees with
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 statement, because it
led
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has led
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 to advancements in medicine and health and improvement of daily
life
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 through technology. Science led to major advancements in medicine and health that helped millions of human
lives
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 because
scientists
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scientists'
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 main goal in their research and studies is to find an improvement to human
life
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. These innovations help people suffer less and increase
life
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 expectancy
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, which
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 will result in better
life
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 quality.
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, during
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COVID-19
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covid-19
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covid-19,
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 almost all scientists worked together to find a cure for
covid-19
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COVID-19
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which
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, which
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 resulted in the discovery of the
covid-19
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COVID-19
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 vaccine that saved and improved a lot of human
lives
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. As for the improvements in daily
life
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, modern technology helps people in their
day to day
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day-to-day
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life
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 not only in small tasks but
also
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 in major ones. Technology assists people through tasks as small as texting someone to as major as performing a surgery.
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, hospitals nowadays use the help of machines with artificial intelligence to assist them in delicate surgeries
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 as open-heart surgery. In conclusion, the most important goal of science should definitely be to improve human
lives
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 because it helps improve the quality of their daily
life
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, and in advancements in health and medicine.

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task response
State your view clearly in the first sentence and restate it in the end so the reader sees your main point.
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Give two or three ideas with a short, clear example for each to show how science helps people.
coherence
Use small linking words like and, but, so, also, for example to show how the ideas fit.
coherence
Make one idea per paragraph and finish each paragraph with a short idea to aid flow.
grammar
Watch grammar; fix long sentences and make the verbs fit the subject.
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The writer shows a clear view and sticks to it.
idea
Examples from medicine and tech are given to back the point.
structure
Conclusion repeats the main idea, which helps structure.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • technological advancements
  • medical discoveries
  • life-changing inventions
  • innovations
  • solutions to human problems
  • enhancing quality of life
  • improvement of healthcare
  • transportation
  • communication
  • agriculture
  • energy sectors
  • eradication of diseases
  • prolongation of life expectancy
  • global challenges
  • climate change
  • overpopulation
  • food security
  • developed world
  • underprivileged communities
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