People are surrounded by all kinds of advertising. Some people believethat advertising has a negative effect on people's lives. To what extent do youagree or disagree?

There is an argument that advertising does harm to
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. From my perspective, I believe
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are beneficial to the economy.
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who hold negative perspectives on advertising argue that
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will detrimentally drive
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's consumption.
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, advertising serves as an information carrier, which will not override personal
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.
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, a rational consumer, if he sees an advertisement
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medical products, he will consider whether the
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are
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suitable for him, rather than make an impulsive purchase.
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, the herd mentality is another factor, which means
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who buy a product follow the crowd
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of making an independent decision.
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, it is not because of the
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, but because individuals are irrational in spending. Advertising bridges the supply-demand gap, which allows
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to receive information and thereby activates
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's potential demands. Not only can
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buy useful goods, but
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also it can
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it can also
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benefit the producers. Take
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sales as an example. The agricultural assistance advertisement helps farmers promote their apples, and thereby increases
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sales by 30%.
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, the farmers enlarge their production and hire more workers. It is essential that
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can not only improve
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's lives, but
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provide more opportunities for employment, and in turn form a great economic circle, which enhances
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economic development. In conclusion, advertising, as an information carrier, undoubtedly plays a significant role in the economy.
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, it is the irrational consumption mindset that drives
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, rather than
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.

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structure
State a clear view in the intro and keep it in the rest of the essay.
coherence
Each paragraph should have one main idea and a link to the next.
coherence
Use more simple linking words to show cause, effect and contrast.
content
Give more explanations for each example and show how it helps your point.
grammar
Check noun and verb form and punctuation to avoid errors.
content
The essay has a clear view and tries to back it with reasons.
structure
The use of a real number (30%) shows effect and adds detail.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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