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The chart below shows various transport tourists used within New Zealand in 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows various transport tourists used within New Zealand in 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the percentage of transportation
chose
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chosen
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 by
tourists
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 from five countries to travel in New Zealand in 2004.
It is clear that
Linking Words
 foreign people were more
incline
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inclined
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 to take
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coach
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a coach
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 for
traveling
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travelling
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 in New Zealand,
while
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 Britain
tourists
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 accounted
the
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for the
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most
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largest
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 proportion in taking
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coach
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a coach
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.
However
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, Ferry is the least option to
chose
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choose
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by
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from among
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 all the
tourists
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. Britain and
German
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Germany
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 had
the
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a
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 similar trend in 2004, more than half of people
opt to
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opted
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coach for
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for coach
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their
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apply
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transportation, at 58%
of
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in
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 Britain and 53%
of
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in
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German
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Germany
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.
Additionally
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, they had the same
portion
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proportion
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 of
tourists
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in
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apply
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using air and ferry, which are 43% and 20% respectively. When it comes to the Asian countries,
Japanese
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the Japanese
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preferred
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prefer
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 to take
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an airplane
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airplane
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aeroplane
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 rather than
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coach
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a coach
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, at over 50
percentage
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per cent
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. Most
tourists
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 from Korea would
driven
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drive
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by
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apply
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themself to have a journey in New Zealand. As for
Australian
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Australians
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, there
was
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were
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 50% people to take
coach
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, which was twofold
of
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that of
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 air.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, coach with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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