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Some people think having a university degree is the best way to secure a good job. However, others belive skills and experience are more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

While
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 some assume that
higher
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a higher
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 level of education is the most effective
way
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 of being competitive on the
job
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 market, Others argue that
companies
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 would rather choose someone with strong
experience based
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experience-based
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 skills. In my
opinion
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opinion,
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 neither of
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this
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these
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 two aspects
are
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is
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 better or worse, because
importance
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the importance
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 of each
skills
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skill
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 varies throughout different
companies
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. On the one hand, if you are looking for a
job
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 in
specific
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a specific
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 sector, some
companies
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 may even treat
university
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a university
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degree
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 as obligatory
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,
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 giving you no chance without it.
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, a lot of
government related
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government-related
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 jobs require applicants to have
higher
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a higher
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 education diploma.
Moreover
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, some
companies
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 might expect you to get a
degree
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 even after hiring you:
for instance
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, in order to give you a
further
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 promotion.
On the other hand
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, there are
also
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 plenty of
companies
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 that
do
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apply
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not only value experience more than a
degree
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, but
also
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 do not require a
degree
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 from their applicants at all.
Furthermore
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,
increasing
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an increasing
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 number of employers tend to change their hiring rules in that direction.
For example
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, Apple - one of the most
recognizable
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recognisable
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 tech
company
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companies
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 in the world - changed their policy recently, so that
university
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a university
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degree
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 is no longer required from new
aplicants
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applicants
. In my opinion, considering both of the spectres
disscused
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discussed
 above, we should combine
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a collage
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collage
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college
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degree
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 and practical experience, to stay
competetive
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competitive
 on the
job
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 market for the long run. That said
it
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, it
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 is a good idea to study,
while
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 performing some part-time
job
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 at the same time to gather not only academic but
also
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 practical
knowladge
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knowledge
 along the
way
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. In conclusion,
Becouse
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because
 each company may have different rules in terms of hiring, there is no clear
way
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 to tell whether
university
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a university
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degree
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 or skills and practice is
a
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the
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 best
way
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 to secure your
furture
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future
job
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.
However
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, I can confidently assume that combining both of
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this
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these
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 aspects would be the most
efective
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effective
way
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 to increase your value as
an
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a
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potentacial
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potential
 employee.

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task
Make your view clear in the end. One strong line of what you think helps the reader see your point.
task
Give more real facts or examples to back each point. It makes your idea stronger.
coherence
In each paragraph, have one big idea. Start with a topic sentence and stick to it.
coherence
Use linking words to move from one idea to the next. Words like first, also, but, however help a lot.
overall
Check spelling and grammar so the writing is easy to read.
structure
The essay has a clear plan: intro, two body parts, and a conclusion.
examples
The writer gives two examples (government jobs and Apple) to support points.
opinion
The opinion is stated in the end, showing a clear view.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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