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Band 2

Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in oreder to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

The
oritentation
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orientation
 of learning a foreign
language
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 is
controverlsial
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controversial
.A part of people think that it is
aim
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an aim
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for working
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to work
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 or
traveling
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travel
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 in a foreign city,but others disagree with it.
In
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From
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 my perspective,studying a second
language
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 can help us
to
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apply
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achieve more opportunities in the future. On one hand,it is common to value the function of
aquiring
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acquiring
 a new
language
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 to find an ideal job or have a nice trip in other countries,
such
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 as English,French and Chinese.Because
langauge
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language
 skill has obvious advantages in
employment
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the employment
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 market and
relastic
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real
 life ,which is the core value
than
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over
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 other aspects.
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,the bilingual employers usually earn
more
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a higher
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 salary than people who
only can
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can only
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 speak one
language
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,like international company traders,reception
stuffs
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staff
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 and tour guides.
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,there is another opinion
says
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that says
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 that it is too utilitarian to define the meaning of learning
new
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a new
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language
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 as it is a bridge to connect with people,it can not only
to
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apply
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help us to
understant
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understand
 others well but
also
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 decrease misunderstanding in different
culture
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cultures
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.A typical instance in diplomacy,if the leaders can use
other
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the other
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 party's
language
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 in communication may
solidate
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solidify
relationship
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the relationship
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 and reduce conflicts.

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structure
Make a clear plan before you write. Start with a short intro that restates the task and your view.
content
Give 2 or 3 clear reasons for your view. For each reason, add a simple example.
conclusion
End with a short conclusion that repeats your view and sums up the ideas.
task response
The essay tries to discuss both sides.
coherence
There are some examples to show points.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proficiency
  • immersion
  • communication
  • cultural nuances
  • intrinsic motivations
  • cognitive benefits
  • personal enrichment
  • multicultural understanding
  • linguistic diversity
  • heritage languages
  • globalized job market
  • valuable asset
  • empirical evidence
  • tolerance
  • harmonious society
  • perspectives
  • cultural exchange
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