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In the future nobkday will buy newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In today's modern world
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, people
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 hold different opinions about whether printed
newspapers
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 and
books
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 will disappear in the future. Some
people
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 believe that in the coming years, no one will purchase printed
newspapers
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 and
books
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 because everything will be available online for free.
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, I completely disagree with
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 idea because printed
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 improve focus and protect human health. In
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 essay, I will discuss these reasons with relevant examples and clear arguments, and I will try to draw a conclusion.
To begin
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 with, printed
newspapers
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 and
books
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 help
people
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 stay more focused
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 reading . It is undeniable that reading on digital devices often distracts readers because of
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 and social media notifications.
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, many students prefer printed textbooks as they find them easier to study without digital interruptions.
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, printed
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 still play an important role in effective learning. Another important reason is that reading online for long hours can affect human health.
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 continuous screen use may cause eye strain, headaches and fatigue. As an illustration, a survey in 2024, many
people
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 complain about vision problems after spending long hours on mobile
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, laptops and computers.
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 printed
books
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 carry emotional and cultural value, which online reading cannot replace. In conclusion, I strongly disagree with the idea that printed
newspapers
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 and
books
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 will vanish
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in the future.
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 online reading is convenient, printed
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 promote more
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focus
, protect health, and preserve our cultural values and emotions.
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, I firmly believe that reading printed
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 provides more benefits and positive outcomes.

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strength
You take a clear side and give reasons. This helps the task.
strength
Linking words are used well. Your ideas go in a good order.
area for improvement
Some grammar and word choice errors make your meaning unclear sometimes.
area for improvement
Add more clear example and check tenses.
stance and position
Clear stance in first and last paragraph.
cohesion
Good use of transition phrases like To begin with, Therefore, In conclusion.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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