The diagram below shows the development of a particular area between 1965 and the present day.

In the past few decades, numerous trees and flowers could be found in

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society, from the plants in the house to a

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trees in the street. The environment is green and healthy. The green was experiencing photosynthesis and released oxygen and water, which are essential for human needs. People could find their neighbours and friends by ferry. Everything was running naturally

and

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the whole Earth is fundamentally clean.

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, after the reformation of technology,

the

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society has become different. Road

bridge

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bridges

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and foot

bridge

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are created,

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different transportation like

bus

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buses

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car

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cars

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taxi

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train

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, and

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have been invented for public use. Is it a good thing to tell? I think the answer may be "No".

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people can enjoy the convenience brought by the technology, the environment is

gradually

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being affected negatively. Vast trees are cut down for industrial

purpose

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purposes

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while

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many

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pollution

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such

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as air

pollution

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, water

pollution

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and wind

pollution

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have emerged.

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, when we are enjoying the technology, as a responsible global citizen, we should be aware of the environmental problem. We should protect our home and not let it be destroyed by ourselves.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

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190 words

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