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The bar chart below shows the percentage of share of total world production by Asia, Europe and other parts of the world from the years 1840 to 2000.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of share of total world production by Asia, Europe and other parts of the world from the years 1840 to 2000.
The following bar chart outlines the information on goods
production
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 from 3 different regions between the years 1840 and 2000.
Overall
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, it is pretty clear that
Europe
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 was the most consistent compared to Asia and the rest of the
world
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.
According to
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 the graph, in the year 1840, Asia had the highest share in
production
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, with 50% in the mentioned year. It ,
however
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, faced a gradual decline, falling to just 20% in 1920. In 2000, there was an upward trend where it overtook
Europe
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 and other regions of the
world
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.
Europe
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 had a stable rate of manufacturing, with numbers not dipping below 25%. It peaked in 1920 with approximately 50%
production
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.
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, in the year 2000,
Europe
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's
production
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 fell as low as 28%. Other regions around the
world
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 had a slow start, with just 10% in 1840. It recorded its highest point in 1960, out-producing
Europe
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 by a single-digit margin;
production
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 was at a moderate 35% in 2000. To summarise, the diagram demonstrates the stability of European manufacturing, the rise and fall of the Asian market, and the rest of the
world
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 slowly making strides in
production
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.

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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slow" was used 2 times.
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