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Privat car ownership has been increasing over the past few decades. This has given ordinary people greater mobility, but has also led to concerns about traffic congestion and air pollution. Do the advantages of private car ownership outweigh the disadvantages?

The prevalence of personal
cars
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 has become a cornerstone of modern life.
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,
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 driving personal
cars
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help
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helps
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 to make individual
lifes
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lives
more
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easier , it
also
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cause
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causes
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 more congestion and
enviromnental isuues
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environmental issues
.
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perspective
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perspectives
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views
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and demonstrate why it is
moren adventageous
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more advantageous
 and its effects on the
economy
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.
on
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 the one hand,
cars
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 are
admittely
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admittedly
 one of the major contributors
of
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to
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 traffic jams and air pollution
over
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around
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 the world.Indeed, they consume time for people who
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 them to arrive
work
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at work
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 or finish their daily tasks. The distance by public transport can take around 30 to 40 minutes
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 repeated standing , by
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cars
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 it take only 10 minutes to arrive
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 destinations.
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, Japan
had
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 banned using
cars
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 in the
central
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 of its capital since 2000
and
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, and
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 people must use bikes only so
it
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leads
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has led
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 to
increase
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an increase
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the
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in the
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 quality of air by more than 70 per cent.
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 , our world now has many sources of energy which are friendly to the
enviroment
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environment
,
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 The problems caused by using
cars
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 are not solved.
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,the
economy
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 can benefit from individuals who use their own automobile.
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,
owing
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 a car
provide
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provides
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 them
ability
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the ability
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 to travel a long route without
commitment
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the commitment
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 of public transport.
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, Saudi Arabia is a huge country
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where
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 you can not move without
owing
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 a car ,
this
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 need
generate
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generates
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 many opportunities for the
economy
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 of
the
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country .As the demand for buying
cars
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 will increase and their
citiziens
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citizens
 will use
it
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them
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 for carrying tourists from one place to
others
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another
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. People who have
cars
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 can live outside the
central
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 of the town where rents for houses are
more
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cheaper than in the capital.
in
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 conclusion , despite its drawbacks of
enviromentals
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environmental
 effects and traffic problems , private
cars
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 have good results on the
economy
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. TO prove that, new
cars
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 which
works
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work
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 by electricity should be built and brought out in the market.

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task response
Answer the question directly in the first or second sentence. State whether you think the advantages or the disadvantages are stronger, then give two or three reasons.
coherence
Make a clear plan before writing. Use three parts: intro, two body parts, and a short conclusion.
coherence
Use linking words to show order and idea. Start with, 'first', 'also', 'but', 'so', 'therefore'.
structure
The essay uses two side ideas with 'on the one hand' and 'on the other hand'.
strategy
It has a closing sentence that gives a view about the topic.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • car
  • cars
  • move
  • time
  • work
  • family
  • shop
  • school
  • travel
  • road
  • air
  • pollution
  • traffic
  • noise
  • health
  • money
  • cost
  • fuel
  • maintenance
  • insurance
  • emergency
  • plan
  • policy
  • public
  • transport
  • bus
  • train
  • bike
  • walk
  • sharing
  • electric
  • clean
  • tax
  • charge
  • parking
  • space
  • design
  • safety
  • accident
  • wealth
  • city
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