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Some people think in order to continually improve the quality of education, high school students should be encouraged to evaluate and criticize their teachers. Others feel that this would result in a loss of respect and discipline in the classroom. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion..

Some people believe that high school
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 should evaluate their
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 to improve education quality. Others think
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 could cause a lack of respect and discipline. On the one hand, allowing
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 to criticise
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 could make education more comfortable for
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. because sometimes
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 can really go too far ,
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 biased attitude towards some
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 or especially lowered marks. If
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 person can influence these problems , of course, it will improve the study experience and make the study process more progressive.
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, asking
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 to criticise
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 might reduce respect in the classroom. Some
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 may give unfair opinions because of personal dislike or bad grades.
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students
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 think that they know better how to teach others than the teacher , but of course it is not true.
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, criticising
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 will influence to relationship between
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 and educators. If
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 feel judged all the time
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 could create tension and make learning harder. In my opinion,
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 should be allowed to share their opinions , but in a respectful and structured way. Feedback forms or an anonymous survey can help improve education without losing respect for
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Fix bad spell and weak grammar; make each sentence a full thought.
organization
Use a clear intro that says what you will do, then a para for each view, then a short end.
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Give more detail for each point, not just one line. Link the idea to the view and to the final opinion.
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The essay shows both sides and gives a plan for how to judge teachers.
organization
You give a clear opinion and a way to keep respect.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Evaluate
  • Criticize
  • Improve educational outcomes
  • Feedback loop
  • Democratic school culture
  • Constructive criticism
  • Authority
  • Fair and constructive feedback
  • Skewed
  • Educational outcomes
  • Engagement
  • Motivation
  • Timely interventions
  • Teacher development
  • Learning experience
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