Many people see animals as tools to be used by humans to better their lives. They believe animals should help feed us and keep us healthy by being subjects to experiments that will lead to new medications and medical processes. Others believe that animals should have the same rights to a good life as humans. Discuss both views and state your own.

THERE IS NO DENYING THE FACT THAT THE EXISTENCE OF
ANIMALS
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ARE CRUCIAL IN OUR LIFE ,
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AS FOR THE ENVIRONMENT, AND
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FARMING.
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IT IS A COMMONLY HELD BELIEF THAT THE WILDLIFE
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EQUIPMENT, WHICH HAS BEEN CONTROLLED BY
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. WHY! TO PROTECT US FROM DISEASES, BY DOING THE WHOLE EXPERIMENTS ON THEM, THERE IS AN ARGUMENT THAT
ANIMALS
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AND
HUMANS
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ARE EQUAL IN EVERYTHING.
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ESSAY WILL ANALYSE
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TOPIC FROM BOTH POINTS OF VIEW AND EXPRESS MY OPINION. ON ONE HAND, IT IS TRUE THAT
ANIMALS
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HAVE A SIGNIFICANT ROLE IN OUR LIVES, BY CONSUMING THEIR MILK AND MEAT. SO WE RELY ON THEM IN MANY SECTORS
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SUCH
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AS
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AGRICULTURE, MEDICAL AND INDUSTRY.
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, NADEC COMPANY
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IT ANNUALLY
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PRODUCES
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1.5 MILLION
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DAIRY PRODUCTS .
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, THE
ANIMALS
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SHOULD HAVE THEIR LIFE WITHOUT HUNTING OR PUTTING THEM IN RISK, BECAUSE THEY HAS THEIR OWN RIGHTS AS PEOPLE HAVE .
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WE BENEFIT FROM THEM IN DIFFERENT FIELDS, WE SHOULD PRESERVE THEIR LIFE AND STOP PREYING
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KILLING THEM WITHOUT REASON, BECAUSE THEY ARE OUR RESPONSIBILITY, AND WE CAN NOT LIVE WITHOUT THEM.
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, IT IS
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AN EXCHANGE OF BENEFITS.
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, WE SHOULD PUT THEM IN AN APPROPRIATE PLACE FOR LIVING TO PROTECT THEM AND
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BENEFIT FROM THEM. TO NUTSHELL, IT IS TRUE THAT WE
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AS
HUMANS
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RELY ON THE
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IN VARIOUS SECTORS. IT IS
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POSSIBLE TO SAY THAT THE WILDLIFE HAVE RIGHTS THAT WE SHOULD RESPECT
THEM
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THEM.
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HOWEVER
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, I TEND TO BELIEVE THAT
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BOTH
ANIMALS
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AND
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HAVE RIGHTS, THEIR
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DIFFER FROM EACH OTHER BECAUSE WE ARE NOT EQUALS.

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structure
Make a plan with clear intro, 2 body parts, and a short ending.
purpose
State your view clearly in one line near the end.
content
Give one or two small examples for each idea to make it real.
language
Use easy words and short sentences. Check for mistakes in grammar and spelling.
coherence
Keep your ideas in order. Use linking words to show how ideas fit.
task response
The essay tries to cover both sides and to give a view at the end.
coherence
There are some simple links between ideas.
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