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The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Panama City from 2010 to 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Panama City from 2010 to 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph presents the variations proportions of crime that happened in Panama
city
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 between 2010 and 2019.
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, the number of burglaries went down sharply , and it was overtaken by
the
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car
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theft
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. Both robbery and
car
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theft
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 remained the same over the period. In 2010, the incidents of burglary were the most common by around 3500
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however
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it
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 experienced a steep decline between 2011 and 2015 by 2500, despite a slight growth in 2016 by 500. The
car
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theft
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 was the second , and decreased from 2012 to 2013 by around 700, even though it became the highest rate in the city in 2019, after which it overtook the number of burglaries. The proportions of robberies stayed the same over the period , but
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 fluctuated
by under
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 500 to 1000 from 2015 to 2019 , respectively. To summarise, the rates of burglary went down sharply , and the
others
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other
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levelled
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levels levelled
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 out , with
the
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car
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theft
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 becoming the most common
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 of
accidents
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, theft with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Crime rates
  • Fluctuated
  • Significant spike
  • Consistent trend
  • Prevalent
  • Cumulative change
  • Enforcement
  • Correlate
  • Reduction/increase in crime
  • Categories of crime
  • Level of crime
  • Period of time
  • Analysis
  • Data representation
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