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The bar chart compares the annual GDP growth rates of Tunisia, Japan, and Ecuador between 2007 and 2010.

The bar chart compares the annual GDP growth rates of Tunisia, Japan, and Ecuador between 2007 and 2010.
The
chart
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 below gives information about the Growth of GDP in each three continents per
year
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 .
Overall
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,
Tunisia
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 had the highest growth rate , and
at the end
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, it started to decline.
However
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 The
Japan
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 had the lowest increase in 2007, and
finally
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 stemmed it
almost
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 reaching the top per cent. Beginning from the
first
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year
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, as mentioned before the
Tunisia
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 had the highest
step
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 , and it was equal to 6%.
Japan
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 had the most notable difference with the
first
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 country, and it was almost 2% and the third country had a slight growth compared to
Japan
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 , and it was 3%. Coming to the second
year
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 , 2008, the
first
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 continent was considered at significantly higher quantities , and it became 4% between 5% and
Japan
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 was equal to 4%. At the final
step
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, Ecuador had the highest percentage ,
then
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Tunisia
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 , and it was almost 5%. In the
year
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 2009, the
first
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step
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 was
Tunisia
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 , and it was equal to 3%. The second country had the highest
chart
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 was 5 per cent , and
at the end
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, the second continent had the lowest
chart
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, 1%. In the
year
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 2010,
Tunisia
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 had of highest
step
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 , and it was equal to 3% and coming in the highest
chart
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 among other countries was almost 6% to 7%. And about a third had a low percentage of 2%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, year, tunisia, japan, first, step with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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