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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel or work in a foreign country, others say that thes are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss these views and give your own opinion.

Most people believe that you need to learn a new
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language
 only for labour or travelling purposes,
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 others think learning a new idiom
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 much more advantages. In my
opinion
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i
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 agree with the idea that learning a new
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language
 is very
usefull
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useful
 for many
diferent
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different
 aspects. To start
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,
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 big part of
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the population
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agree
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 that you should learn a new
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language
 only if you need it for your professional
carreer
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. They defend the idea that that you are not gonna need it if you don´t travel to other countries, they don´t find pourpose in spending time learning something new when in the day by day we use our native
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 to express with everyone around us,
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 because in order to learn something new you have to spend money in teachers and time in studying,
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 they see it as a way to loose money and time if you are not gonna use it. And to put things in
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perspective,
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 I am
triying
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trying
 to get
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 IELTS
certfication
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certification
 only to study next year in
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 Australian university that requires
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english
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 certification.
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, getting to study
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 idiom can have other purposes, first of all, you never know when
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you
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 gonna need it to communicate with others, imagine you fall in love with a foreign
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woman,
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 you will need to know her
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language
 if you want to communicate with her.
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Also
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 we live in a globalised society
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, so
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 in your
profesional carreer
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professional career
 you will for sure need to know as
much
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many
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 idioms as you are capable, since all countries are connected and even if you work in a company of your own
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country,
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 you will need to communicate with other workers from
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around
 the world. I personally agree with
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 idea since it shows how important it is not just for living abroad but for many other
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. In conclusion, you can contemplate learning a new
dialect
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language
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 not just if you want to visit a new nation but
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 to
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 yourself and be prepared if you have to use it at some point
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 your life.

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structure
Plan your essay before writing: introduce your view, present two clear ideas in separate paragraphs, then finish with a short conclusion.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bilingualism
  • cultural immersion
  • cognitive skills
  • globalization
  • communication
  • perspective
  • folklore
  • cultural heritage
  • interpersonal relationships
  • self-development
  • linguistic diversity
  • travel experience
  • career prospects
  • language proficiency
  • enhance
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