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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
The
table
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 and charts illustrate the government budget
,
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apply
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 between 2017 and 2018. In Britain. The
table
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,
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apply
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show
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shows
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 the resource for the money
and
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, and
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 the charts show how it was distributed.
Overall
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, the
table
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 shows us the
sources
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which
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, which
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 it: national government, local taxes and other
sources
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.
For the
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The
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 charts it's show us the percentage
on
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of
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 the ways money
spent
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is spent
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. First of all, the
table
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 shows us the
sources
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and
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, and
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 all
sources
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 increase. The national government in 2017
,
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 was around 175m
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then
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, then
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 in 2018 there
is
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was
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small
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a small
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 increase. About local taxes, in 2017 was 91.2m
after
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; after
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 that
in
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, in
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 2018, there
is
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was
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 a significant increase
which
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, which
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it jump
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jumped
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 to 102.3m. Other
sources
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is
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are
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 constant. On
other
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the other
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 hand, the money in 2017
,
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apply
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 was spending the most
in
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on
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 salaries. About 8% on technology and 17% on buildings and transport. In 2018, the most doesn't change but decreases, at
first
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first,
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 salaries %69. The technology increases and
reach
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reaches
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 14%.
Although
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 the buildings and transport stay steady.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words table, sources with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • government policies
  • economic conditions
  • community services
  • crime prevention
  • public safety
  • significant increase/decrease
  • distribution
  • assessment
  • reflection
  • allocation shifts
  • budget comparison
  • impact analysis
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