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Writing Samples
Band 3

The tradition that family gets together to eat meals is disappearing. What are the reasons? What are the impacts on families and societies?

It has been
notices
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 that
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this
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these
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days
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 individuals like to have
there
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their
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 own meals
instead
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 of having
it
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them
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togeather
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together
 with the family.
This
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change
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 has been noticed because of several reasons
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such
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 as
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change
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 in
the
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apply
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lifestyle, families becoming nuclear
and
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, and
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change
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a change
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 in the attitude of
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people
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.
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,
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this
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these
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 changes
also
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comes
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come
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 with
its
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their
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 own disadvantages
on
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 the communities. I have discussed both the
casue
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cause
 of
change
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as well as
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 its impact in the ensuing paragraphs .
To
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 with,
people
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 are
much
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very
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 busy when it comes to work.
Which
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make
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makes
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 it difficult for them to contribute time to
there
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their
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 family,
this
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 is one of the
reason
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reasons
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 why they do not have
there
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their
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 food
togeather
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together
.
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this
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in
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early
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the early
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days
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people
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use
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 to stay in
joint
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a joint
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 family, where the food
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use
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 to be cooked
togeather
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together
 for everyone
;
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.
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,
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this
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these
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days
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its
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it's
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 mainly the
patner
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partner
 staying together
along with
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there
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their
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kid
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kids
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making
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 it easy for
every one
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everyone
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 to make the food
there
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their
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 choice and have it
seperately
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separately
.
Lastly
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,
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this
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these
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days
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individual
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individuals
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 are
self centred
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self-centred
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making
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 them selfish.
For instance
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, if they
would be
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were
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hungry
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hungery,
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 they would have
there
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their
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 meal without thinking of
other
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others
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 where
as
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 in
past
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the past
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this
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, this
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 was not the case
,
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;
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people
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use
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 to wait for other family
member
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members
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 before having
the
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their
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 meals. There are multiple impacts that can be seen because of
this
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change
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.
Firstly
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,
people
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 have become more
self centred
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self-centred
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.
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secondly
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, they are not contacted
to
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by
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 the family as
it
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they
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use
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 to be in the past .

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Task response
Add a clear intro that states the topic and a short ending that restates your view.
Coherence
Put ideas in order: reasons first, then effects, then a short end.
Grammar
Use simple, correct sentences. Check spelling and grammar so mistakes do not distract.
Coherence
Use linking words like because, and, but to join ideas.
Task response
Give one or two clear examples to prove your points.
Vocabulary
Choose precise but simple words and avoid long phrases.
Content
You try to cover both reasons and effects.
Structure
The topic is clear and you begin to talk about it.
Thinking
You show a sense of past and now in the talk.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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