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The two maps below show the changes that have taken place in thetown of Westley since 1815.

The two maps below show the changes that have taken place in thetown of Westley since 1815.
The two maps compare the variation of the
town
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 of Westley between 1815 and now.
Overall
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 ,as is presented in the two pictures,the geographic
feather
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feature
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 of Westley is stable.There
is
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are
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 River Twins on the west,
while
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 Lake
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lenton
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Lenton
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 and Tinton village
on
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are on
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 the east of the
town
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.
What’more
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What’s more
,a road
comes across
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crosses
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 the main
area
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 and
connect
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connects
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 the
town
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’s transportation as a whole. In 1815,the
town
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 was still
a
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an
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 agricultural
area
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 with many fields and houses in the south,on both sides of the road .It was ruled by lord Westly,and his house was in the northwest corner of the
town
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,
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.
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Lenton
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 Woods
lied
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lay
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 between it and
other
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the other
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 houses.The
town
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centre
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 was a church,to its south,the market square and
town
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 hall were
surrounding
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surrounded
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 by the houses.The only road to London was Twine Toll Bridge across the river
and
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, and
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 The Coach Inn was located to the northwest of the crossroad,as an entrance
of
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to
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 the
town
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. The
town
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 has experienced great development over the more than two centuries.The
area
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 is enlarged mainly
on
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to
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 the south,the fields are replaced by a shopping,business and residential
area
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 in the east , the main railway station and a railway in the west,and a cinema in the middle.In the northern part of the
town
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also
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 changed a lot,as the
Lenton
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 Housing Estate
is
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was
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 established,there are
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Lenton
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the Lenton
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 Hotel,The Red Lion ,
Sports
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the Sports
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Centre
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 and
Museum
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the Museum
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 surrounding it.The new
town
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centre
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 is West Gate Shopping
Centre
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,a
morden
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modern
 transport network
locates
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located
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on
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apply
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there.
What’more
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What’s more
,it’s clear that
,
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apply
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the market square and
town
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 hall
has
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have
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 remained till now.

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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, lenton, area, centre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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