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The two maps below show the changes that have taken place in thetown of Westley since 1815.

The two maps below show the changes that have taken place in thetown of Westley since 1815.
The diagrams illustrate some proposed changes to the
town
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 of Westley since 1815.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 some
areas
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such
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, such
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 as
village
Correct article usage
the village
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,
lake
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the lake
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,
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town
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the town
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 hall and
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the market
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market
Punctuation problem
market,
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 have not changed,
while
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 there are some principal changes to the
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town
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town,
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will be
Verb problem
including
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 the
constructions
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construction
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 of
the
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apply
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diversified
areas
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 like
museum
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the museum
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 and
shopping
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the shopping
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center
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centre
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. Various other developments with regard to the nature
areas
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 have reduced
and
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, and
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 modern buildings
are
Verb problem
have
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 increased. Looking at the map both in 1815 and now, the location of
tinton
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Tinton
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villiage
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Village
 is in the top right corner of the maps. Meanwhile,
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town
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the town
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 hall and
market
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the market
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 square are side by side.
they
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They
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 are located in the eastsouthern, which
are
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is
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closed
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close
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 to the road.
Lastly
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, the position of a peaceful lake is under the
villiage
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village
.
By comparison
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, there is a bridge above the river, which can provide access to London in 1815, but a railway
instead
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 and a main railway station is
bulit
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built
 nowadays.
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Also
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Also,
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 the
argricultural
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agricultural
areas
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 are replaced by them.
Moreover
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, the housing estate
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instead
Punctuation problem
, instead
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 of the forest, the coach inn and
church
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the church
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 are demolished to
creat
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create
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 a sports
center
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centre
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 and a museum. In detail, there is a shopping
center
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centre
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 and a cinema for now, which are
closed
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close
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 to the residential
areas
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 that construct an area
combines
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combining
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 business, shopping and living.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "instead".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, areas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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