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Space explorations costs tax payers an extra orbitant amount of money each year. What are the advantages and disadvantages of spending money on space explorations?

It is often argued that
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people
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 need to contribute to the tax more and more every year for
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 discoveries. Even though
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 exploration inspires the young generation to pursue their studies, many
people
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 in state of the opinion that it requires billions of dollars.
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 essay will discuss both views and conclude
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the
 opinion. Finding new things in
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 is an interesting topic for the younger generation. It mostly encourages them to focus on Science, Technology, Engineering and Mathematics. And
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 educators show that nowadays children are trying to invent new robots, mini
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 crafts , because of these
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 discoveries. As an example , in my country, the most outstanding school technology invention prize has gone to the mini satellite , which was created by
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fourteen-year-old rural school boy
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, the government has to allocate lots of
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 in billions for these
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 explorations. Developed countries are able to sponsor those inventions. In 2024 United States of America spent 30 billion dollars on a new satellite invention. But many
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 argue
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that money can help to overcome poverty
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 discoveries are expensive,
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 it can be a waste of money and time. Since young
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 intenselyintensly interested in exploring new findings in
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 it eventually motivates them to learn more about STEM education , which helps
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them to
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 become inventors and scientists in the future.
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, I believe that the taxpayers' money will not be wasted.

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improvement
Plan your writing with a clear start, middle, and end. Use one idea per paragraph.
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Use easy link words to join ideas. Examples: first, also, but, however, for example.
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Fix mistakes in grammar and spell. Read slowly to spot errors like 'intenseintensly' and 'anthe'.
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Give more clear examples for each point. This helps the reader see your idea.
content
You tell both sides and give your view.
example
A real example from your country is used.
structure
There is a short conclusion that sums up your view.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • astronomical costs
  • technological innovations
  • scientific breakthroughs
  • economic stimulus
  • international cooperation
  • financial investment
  • allocation of resources
  • environmental impact
  • ethical considerations
  • high-risk ventures
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